Friday, March 21, 2014

at evening


could I be
a sundown man
enfold you
unfold you
the colored rays
of our shining
the western sky
at evening?

~ ralph murre


Jennifer Ruth Jackson said...

I really love the sentiment with this. For some reason though, I stumble over part of it, like my brain is missing a word or phrase. It's just me, don't worry.

It is a lovely piece.

Ralph Murre said...

Thanks, Jennifer. I suppose those closing lines, if written as prose, would go something like, "Could the colored rays of our shining BE the western sky at evening?", and maybe that's how the poem should read, but I like it as is.